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I must say, the color palette is nice. It all "fits" together without any eye-sores that stick out as far as colors go.

I noticed that the highlights in her eyes don't have that octogon/hexagon shape like the crystal ponies do in the show. Is that on purpose? Also, the shadows put on the highlights like very awkward and out of place. Light doesn't have a shadow. The objects a light source shines on makes the shadow and that is what makes the highlights on the eyes look more mishapened golf balls n her eye. Sorry if I'm coming off as rude, but that really bothered me. Heh.

The forelimbs also look very odd. I'm pretty sure that it is only due to the fact that you gave the forelimbs two joints instead of three. A little look at pony anatomy can easily fix that.

I really like the slightly varied shapes you gave the crystals in the picture. It gives it a slightly less "man-made" feeling than I probably would have got otherwise. The way you shaded them, though, kinda' bother me. When I look the crystals alone, I see no well defined light soucre. I know they can show light as bounced off the rocks they're sitting in, but I don't see a direction where the light is the strongest. From the overall picture I think I'm supposed to assume that the light source is Sapphire, but what if it was actually coming from the right at whatever Sapphire is looking at?

I mean, a simple thing like a light source's position can make a picture a bunch more interesting when you think about it.

Overall I liked the picture, especially how you blurred the foreground and the far background(also: why didn't blur the crystals in the far background? they kinda stick out...) to make Sapphire the center of attention. :D
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:iconoelopez:
OELopez Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
There are some errors because I was analyzing this critique here. "Also, the shadows put on the highlights like very awkward and out of place..." makes me confused because I don't know what you are implying. I attempted to make her eyes to look different from the rest of the Ponies. Maybe this attempt doesn't work with certain amount of fans, but I really don't want to make her pupil black just like other ponies.

Also, you just like only the color choice; you didn't point what is good and wrong about Sapphire Glow's design (mane and wings, body was by :iconsilvercommando: and that is that I'm really looking for. The light source is from the right and very distant because the direction of the river that goes out to. Maybe you didn't extract the ideas of this picture correctly. I sometimes ask questions and do some little research before I can critique.

Before it was edited, the background was too bright and very distracting, thus assuming the light source is way too close. I really want to make the cave very dark, but still have a light source that is very distant.

Blurring the crystals in the background ruins its purpose of the crystal (the "shinyness") if I overdo it.
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:iconathensthegreat:
Well, you should have specified that you wanted a critique regarding the design rather than drawing itself. That what most people will critique if you don't specify. Also, do you know what I meant by the "highlights on the eyes?" I wasn't talking about the pupils, I was talking about the highlights on the eyes. Literally the white spots signifiying the light source. You gave them shadows(the black around the edges) and light itself doesn't have a shadow.

Plus, blurring the crystals in background(not foreground if that is you thought I meant) doesn't ruin the "shinyness" if you do it right. If I'm in a jewlery shop, anything my eyes aren't foucused on is automatically blurred no matter how bright and sparkly it is. It's just the way the eye works.

You seemed to try and defend almost every critique I gave you. Is there anything you accepted? You can't really request a critique and take time to debunk all what a person has to say(Ex: Nothing is wrong with my art because of A, B, and C...) Whether it was regarding what you wanted to see or not, it defeats the purpose of requesting a critique in the first place!
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:iconoelopez:
OELopez Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I did update my drawing if you want to look
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:iconathensthegreat:
Man, I can really see the improvements! I mean, I really like it! Maybe it's just me being a big softie when it comes to blue colors or something, but this is one of my new favorites of yours. I can't really choose a 'most' favorite from your gallery, but ya' know..

And sorry 'bout being a bit blunt in my critique. It's a very bad habit of mine and I'll try to work on it. ::ashamed::
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:iconoelopez:
OELopez Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for your critique, but I took it personally and not show it to everyone. I highly assumed that it is much better than the prevoius one. So I did test things out based on your critique and I discovered shadowing more. It was my first attempt to do so and it really works (especially the background and the shadow made from Sapphire's left wing. Pleas critique this again if you point out any flaws and improvements.

I don't agree on one critique that makes me retaliate, but if there is two or more critiques that points out a similar flaw, then there is a problem in my drawing and I have to look at that flaw. Thanks again.
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:iconathensthegreat:
Yeah, I really did like the shadow cast by the wing too. Makes her seem more "solid" even when I'm not looking at it through my 3DS. I'd rather not give this another critique since you've already took time to change it once(I personally don't change my pictures more than once so I wouldn't want to make someone else do it) and there really isn't any eyesores.

So, I shall continue to stalk your gallery along with others...
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:iconoelopez:
OELopez Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Please do
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